Friday, February 24, 2012

Chapter Seven (Ava Adore)

Previously, on "Heat":
Ch. 6 (What Would Happen)
-Naveah's attempt to have some alone time with Jake backfired when the rest of the group joined them in the hot tub.
-Landon and J.C. were surprised to find out that Brooke was in a show called 'The Real World, Sunset Valley'.
-Jake found himself playing around with Jamie after she splashed him, but he wished she was a brunette.
-Nate and Jessica had a steamy make-out session in their own private hot tub.
-He asked her if she wanted to go back to his place.
-She said, "Yes...hell yes."

*Graphic sexual content, nudity, strong language*

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Location: 4400 Hamming Pier Road
Date: Monday, 10/31/11
Time: 1:27 a.m.

Jake holds the door open for Jamie as she steps inside the apartment, her high heels tapping on the wooden floor.  He smiles, trying to cover up the tightness in his chest as she walks past him, her delicate perfume breezing past his nose.  Since Jessica decided to leave with Nate, Landon offered to drive Naveah, Brooke and J.C. home.  To Jake's surprise, Jamie said yes when he asked if she wanted to hang out at his place.  He usually doesn't do that with girls he just met, but he feels at ease with Jamie, like she can be someone he can be good friends with.  And she really isn't a stranger since she's roommates with Nate's ex.

"Do you mind if I use your bathroom?" Jamie asks, setting her purse down on the leather couch.      

"Not at all.  It's the first door to your left." He explains as he sits down and grabs the t.v. remote.  For a minute, he tries to remember if the bathroom is filthy, causing him to panic.  Then it dawns on him that Nate just cleaned it a few days ago.  Jake sighs in relief.  Whew. It's good to have a neatfreak brother.

"Thanks.  I'll be right back." 

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Nate, on the other hand, heads straight to his room with Jessica not too far behind. Just the sight of the bed brings hazy flashbacks of her naked body sprawled out all over it.  On her back, on her stomach, on her knees, on all fours.  Sweat dripping down her agile body as her face contorts in pure bliss when she screams his name.  He knows this could complicate things even more.  He has no business getting involved with her again.   The woman he imagines himself falling in love with is supposed to be the girl-next-door type.  Jessica is far from the girl-next-door.  She looks like a biker chick, she cusses like a sailor and she parties like she's still in college.

The last time they saw each other was when she ran off from his apartment in tears, after a screaming match, especially when she asked him if he loved her.  He hesitated.  He told her he cared about her, but...he wasn't sure how he felt.  After that, she didn't return any of his calls or texts.  

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"Jess, what are we doing?" Nate whispers as he wraps his arms around her waist from behind.  He presses himself against her soft body, inhaling the sweet scent emanating from her neck.  

"I don't know...I can leave if you want." She sighs, her voice barely audible.

"No...don't leave." His hands travel down her hips as he kisses the nape of her  long neck. 

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"I like your place." Jamie sits down next to Jake.  As she scans the living room, her eyes widen at the sight of the poster behind the t.v.  "Huh! I have that same 'Strangetown' poster in my room."

"Seriously? You like that movie?" Jake turns to her in surprise as he narrows his eyes in disbelief.  He's been a huge fan of 'Strangetown' since it came out when he was a freshman in high school.  Noone shares his enthusiasm for SciFi, not even his parents, brothers or best friend J.C. 

"Yeah, I'm a huge SciFi fan.  'Strangetown' is one of my favorite movies.  I think 'Strangetown I' and 'Strangetown IV' are the best ones they made so far." 

"Huh." He sits back in silence, staring blankly at the t.v.  Not only is this girl hot and fun to be with, but she just took the words right out of his mouth.  Suddenly he feels very uneasy around her.

"What? You're not into SciFi?"

"I didn't even know blondes watch SciFi." He murmurs, never wavering his gaze from the t.v.  Shit, why did I just say that?

"Shut up! You're blonde too!" She punches him on the arm.

"OW!! What the hell?" He hisses in pain as he looks down at his arm, trying  to pinpoint the exact spot that her fist landed on.


"Tell you what. You can punch me back if you beat me in 'Knockout'." Jamie negotiates when she spies the video game case next to the console. Could this be her way of saying she feels bad for decking him?

"I'm not gonna punch you. Are you crazy?" Jake looks at her like she's lost her mind. There has to be a catch.

"What's the matter? Scared to get beat by a girl?" She picks up a wireless control and hands it to him, with the an evil smile that's bordering on sexy.

"Oh, it's on now!" He walks over to the console to turn it on, but he never leaves her gaze.

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"You are so dead!" Jamie delivers a series of punches to Jake's character, knocking him to the ground.

"I'm just going easy on you, Blondie." Jake forces his man to get up but his lifeline is already on red.  He is one hit away from getting knocked out. " You haven't even seen---" 

"Hah! In yo' face!" She lands a brutal jab to the cheek, sending Jake's character to the ground again.  

"What?? Noo!! Get up!" He frantically tries to revive his fighter but time runs out.

"I whooped your butt, Blondie!" She grins, taunting him mercilessly.

"Umm..yeah, I was just warming up.  Next round, let's go!" 

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"Nate, you so are fucking hot." Jessica murmurs as Nate crawls on top of her, her rosy nipples already stiff, grazing his chest.  

"Oh yeah?" Nate bites her chin as he rubs his growing erection between her legs.  

"Yeah.  Oh my God, whenever I see you in your uniform, I just about cream my panties." 

"Oh, shit.  You just made my dick hard." He looks down at the tent straining inside his boxer briefs. 

"Mmmm...I miss that big dick." She bites her lower lip as she reaches for his stiff length, gazing into his pale blue eyes like a femme fatale.

"No, baby, not yet." He bucks at the touch of her hand. "I need to taste it.  Gimme some of that sweet stuff." 




















"It's you that
 I adore
Youll always be
 My whore
You'll be the mother
To my child
And a child to
My heart
We must never
Be apart
We must never
Be apart"

After sucking on her tongue, his mouth slowly moves down to her throat, leaving a wet trail on her skin.  She caresses his muscular arms as his mouth moves closer to her breasts, which are rising and falling in anticipation.  His tongue traces the area between her ribcage, slowly licking the hint of chlorine still lingering on her skin.  He squeezes her left breast with one hand while his mouth hungrily sucks the other one, nearly covering the entire area with his mouth as his tongue swirls around the swollen nipple.  A soft moan escapes her mouth as she runs her hands across his head, pulling him in even more.  He moves his mouth to the other breast, sucking at the nipple so hard, she hisses between her teeth.

He moves his face down to her stomach, lightly biting her skin as his lips travel lower.  He kisses her belly button before lightly tugging at her panties, planting warm kisses on the skin underneath, making her gasp.  His eyes continue to meet her gaze as she watches him impatiently, her breath becoming more shallow.  Smiling, Nate kisses her panties until his mouth reaches the fabric that's hiding her soft flesh.  He nibbles on it from the outside, teasing her, licking her, slowly driving her wild.

"Damn it, Nate, eat me!!" She grips the pillows with both hands as she thrashes her head from side to side.

"Say please, Nate.  Please eat me." He grins as he presses his face against her panties, inhaling her musky scent.  It makes him think of pineapples, just ripe and juicy, ready for picking.  The mere whiff of her wetness causes his dick to contract, making him want to pound her right there and then.  But he promised himself he was going to enjoy every inch of her, and that's what he's going to do.  

"Nate...please...please eat me. Pleaaaase!" She whimpers, her thighs quivering in frustration.















After taking her panties off, he takes a moment to just savor her lying between the pillows naked, heaving in anticipation, with her long legs parted.  She has this vulnerable look in her eyes, letting him know that she's all his for the taking.  He has the green light to do whatever he wants with her body.  He lifts her leg up as he kisses her inner thigh, slowing down as he gets closer to her hot center.  To torture her even more, he swirls his tongue around her groin, making him painfully close but not close enough.  But the smell of her dripping desire is too powerful to ignore.  

He wraps her thighs around his neck as he buries his face between her legs, her juices smeared all over his mouth as his tongue probes between the warm folds.  Her moans become deeper as his tongue goes in and out of her slippery walls, bringing her to her first orgasm.  Knowing she's still contracting, he flicks his tongue over her sensitive button while his middle and pointer finger penetrate her, pushing her into another wave of ecstasy.  

"Oh Nate, I'm gonna come again! I'm gonna fucking come!!" She arches her back as she squeezes his head between her thighs, grinding on his face.

"Mmmm...you taste so good...come all over my face." He mumbles, his voice muffled between her legs.

"Oh, Naaaaaaate!! Oh God, oh God!" Her hips convulse as her body explodes in a million waves.  A surge of poweful tingles travel from her pelvic area all the way to the tip of her toes like electric circuits gone haywire.

"Yeah, that's it.  Mmmm..." His mouth continues to follow the convulsions of her hips until her spasms subside.



Jessica rolls down the condom down Nate's whole length, lightly squeezing it as she strokes up and down until he's rock hard.  She straddles his hips, raising up slightly to rub his head back and forth between her flesh, teasing him.  Slowly, she eases down on him, feeling her damp walls stretch with every inch that passes.  Nate raises up as he pushes himself into her, slowly at first to savor the delicious tingles burning around him.  He closes his eyes as she envelops him in her warmth.  She's just as tight as he remembers.  The way she squeezes him as she glides up and down, makes him grip her hips even tighter.  Her moans become deeper as she moves faster, her breasts bouncing as she arches her back, her hands pushing him down on the bed even more.  

"Damn, Jess...you feel so fucking good..." He groans as he opens his eyes to watch himself slide in and out of her, with her juices dripping down the rubber.

"You miss this pussy?" She bites her lips as she slows down, loving the way his face contorts, knowing she's gripping him even tighter.  

"Hell yeah...bounce on it.  Come on baby, bounce!" He thrusts deeply into her until he can't go any further, causing her to let out a throat-rumbling moan.  His hands travel up to her breasts, squeezing them hard, before they land on her ass.  He can feel her body tense up as her moans become more rapid, knowing she's on her way to a third orgasm.  

"Oh, Nate, Nate!!"

"Touch yourself.  I wanna see you come again." He orders as he speeds up his thrusts, squeezing her ass, watching her lean back on one hand while she strokes herself with the other hand.  

"Naaaaathan Rosssssssi!! Que rico, papi! Que rico!!" She screams as she gushes all over him, her hips jerking wildy.  Seeing her come for the third time drives him even more insane.  He pounds into her while her body is still shaking, bringing him to his own explosion.  He holds on to her hips as he releases himself inside of her, a wave of heat and powerful tingles bursting from the center of his body, spreading to all of his extremities.  She continues to squeeze him with her walls until he has spent every last drop.

"Holy shit, you speak Spanish?" He collapses on the bed, feeling like his brain just short-circuited from the mindblowing orgasm.  

"Now I do. And I'm not done with you yet." She eyes him seductively as she crawls on top of him, tracing the outline of his ab muscles with her tongue.












By the time her mouth encloses his head, he's already hard.  Again.  He watches as she holds the base with her hand while her tongue runs up and down his whole length.  Slowly, each inch disappears inside her mouth until her lips nearly touch his pubic bone.  As her mouth moves back up, she presses the walls of her mouth even tighter, creating more friction against his skin.  He drops his head back as the warm of her mouth is almost too much for him to bear, it feels too damn good.  

"Mmmm...I can't get enough of you, Nate.  I can do this all day." She looks up at him with drugged eyes while her mouth continues to devour him.  She has this hunger that he's never seen on any other girl before, especially when he's in her mouth.  

"Oh yeah...like that.  Keep it like that...mmm..." He hisses between his teeth as he pushes her head in, burying himself deeper into her mouth.  The sound of her moaning, breathing heavy and slurping all over him is pushing him over the edge as the build-up of tingles and heat continue to grow in his pelvic area.   

"Mmmm...I want you to come in my mouth." She gently strokes his throbbing length as she tantalizes him with her pale hazel-green eyes.  

"No.  I want to fuck you again." He pulls her up by her arms and throws her on the edge of the bed, with her ass sticking out.  She has brought out this side of him, this darkness that he's becoming a slave to.  After what she just said, it's not about feelings or love anymore.  It's not even about passion or desire.  It's a deeper hunger that wants all of her.  

"In you I see dirty
In you I count stars
In you I feel so pretty
In you I taste God
In you I feel so hungry
In you I crash cars
We must never be apart"








He rams into her from behind, spreading her legs even wider, causing her to cry out in a threshhold between pain and pleasure.  This fuels him to drive into her even harder, nearly lifting her off the bed.  But she continues to moan heavily, loving it even more, pushing herself deeper into him.  He's intoxicated by the way his pelvis slaps against her ass with each hard thrust, accompanied by her heavy breathing.

"Yes, right there!! Fuck me harder!!" She grinds against him until he completely buries himself inside her.  

"You love the dick, don't you??" He slaps her ass so hard, it leaves a red welt.  

"Yes, I love the dick!! God, I love the dick!" She screams in delirious bliss, sticking her ass out even more as she meets his thrusts.

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"Umm...do you know how long they're gonna be in there?" Jamie asks as she tries to ignore the endless moans and groans coming from Nate's bedroom.

"Honestly, I don't know.  You want me to take you home?" Jake shrugs, feeling even more embarassed having to listen to his brother have sex...with a girl standing right in front of him.

"Could you?  If I had known Jessica was going to pull an all-nighter with Nate, I would have left with my other roommates." 

"Haha. It's no big deal.  Come on, I'll take you home." He smiles as he grabs his keys from the coffee table.

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Jake can't help but wonder what would have happened if he took Jamie in his room.  Would she have followed him or would she have asked him to take her home?  What was going through her head while Nate and Jessica were getting it on behind closed doors?  Then again, she punched him on the arm when he made a blonde joke, which probably means she sees him as a friend and nothing more.  But why does he feel uneasy around her?  If things really are platonic between them, she wouldn't have this affect on him, nor would the sex noises coming from Nate's room make things seem...awkward.

"So what do you do?" Jake tries to break the silence as he briefly looks in her direction.

"I work in an advertising firm.  What about you?" 

"That's awesome. I'm a firefighter." 

"Oh..." There's a mixture of surprise and intrigue in her eyes. She lets her gaze linger just a little bit longer before she looks away.
  
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Location: 2883 Industrial Drive

Time: 6:03 a.m.

Jake pulls up to a large house surrounded by a beautiful view of the dark blue water.  He starts to wonder if she's single or if there's someone special in her life.  Then again, she did come home with him, which shows that she's open to meeting new people. At the same time, she might be having problems with her man...and she's checking out the market.  Still, he can't help but wish he can spend a little more time with her.  Talk more about SciFi, perhaps?

"Well...this is me." She clutches her purse as she turns to him.

"Nice house." He smiles.  He tries not to think about how much hotter she would look if she was a brunette.  It would definitely make her mocha skin even more luscious.

"Thanks.  I'm Jamie by the way."

"Nice to meet you, Jamie.  I'm Jake." Just as he holds out his hand, he hesitates.

"I know.  You told me twice in the hot tub." A smile forms on her face as she rolls her eyes.

"Oh.  Haha.  Sorry about that." Just the thought of his idiotic antics makes his cheeks turn crimson.  She probably thinks I'm a dork now.

"No worries, I had fun.  Well, thanks for the ride, Jake."

"You're welcome."

"Here's my number...if you wanna hang out again sometime." She hands him her business card, which includes her cell phone number.

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As he drives away from her house, he gets this urge to look in the rear-view mirror. The sight of her standing there, watching him, takes his breath away.  Does she want him to turn around and come back? For a moment, he wonders if he should stop the car.  He can ask her what she's doing later on today.  But he doesn't want to sound eager or needy.  After all, she just asked him to take her home.  Maybe she has other plans.  

She did, however, give him her number.  She wants to hang out.  In what capacity though: as friends or something more? Jake's mind is being pulled in all directions as he tries to figure out what to do.  Then he remembers what Luke and Nate told him. If she gives you the number, use it.  But make her wait.  

With this epiphany, he takes a deep breath and drives off.  


*Copyright 2012 Lyn C.S.*
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Author's Note:  I was so nervous about posting this chapter.  Since this was the first love scene in the story, I was debating if I should keep it clean or keep it true to what Nate and Jessica wanted.  I even edited some parts out, but in the end, I realized that I had to keep it true to the characters.   So now you know why this story is rated "R" and why it's called "Heat". It's not for everybody. :-) Thanks in advance for reading! 
*Ch. 29 (In My Veins) from "Memoirs Of A City Girl" covers Luke's trip with Lyn to Hangman's Tree. 


"Ava Adore" by The Smashing Pumpkins
Video by: SmashingPumpkinsVEVO

31 comments:

  1. So Lyn I have to say you have ruined my ability to eat pineapples ever again. Thanks a lot for that.

    Moving on Nate and Jessica...bad combination I'm thinking. The sex is there but not much else which is the reason they can't seem to stay together.

    That second time, no condom? I hope she's on the pill or that could be a problem.

    Jake is such a cutie. He's kinda crushing on Jamie. They could make a cute couple possibly. Looking forward to seeing where that goes.

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    1. LOL don't blame me, blame Nate! He's the one that thinks she smells like pineapples. And he's the one munching on her. All I did was describe it. xD

      Well, Nate and Jessica have an intense sexual attraction. The whole pervy fireman + forbidden femme fatale + disapproving mom may have something to do with it. One thing for sure, they set the sheets on fire. Nate loves the fact that he can be so raw with her, and she knows exactly what buttons to push to really send him over the edge. As far as the long term, only time can tell where these two are headed.

      There's definitely potential between Jake and Jamie. Now it's up to Jake to make that call and make things happen.

      Thanks for reading, Jaz!

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  2. I'm thinking Nate is fixin' to get in wayyy over his head getting back with Jessica, not sure how that's gonna turn out. Gotta admit though, the sex they have is crazy hot!~

    I'm thinkin' maybe Jamie likes Jake as much as he does her, didn't hurt that she got all googlie when he told her he was a firefighter.. i think he has a shot!...edenz~

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    1. I agree, when Nate and Jessica get it on, they don't hold back. Their sexual chemistry is very strong, and this is why they keep coming back to each other even when they try to break things off. Nate needs to be careful though, and not mess with this girl's emotions. Karma's a bitch, and I'd hate to see him get a taste of his own medicine.

      There's definitely something between Jake and Jamie but it's too early to tell exactly what it is. They do seem to get along well, so that's a good sign. You're right, the fact that she got all googlie eyed when she found out he's a firefighter, earns him brownie points.

      Thanks for reading, Edenz!

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  3. Wow Lyn you are amazing. Chapter 7 was your hottest and best chapter yet. I think you almost went past the R rating on that one. You don't have to worry about getting too graphic with me. I will be 35 years old in October and Ive seen alot of things like this in my life time. This chapter had to be this way for it to be effective and you pulled it off flawlessly. Keep up the good work Lyndsey Pie and Ill be waiting for your next chapter. Bye for now Wild Thang. Have a great weekend.

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    1. Awww Tom, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! I know I gave you a warning beforehand, but I still felt nervous about your reaction, especially since you're a guy. This has to be the most sexually explicit sex scene I've done so far, and you're right, it's pushing past the R rating. Ideally I would have wanted the love scene between Nate and Jessica to be more romantic, but their personalities and situation just didn't call for it.

      It helps to know that you've seen stuff like this before and you're an adult, but the fact that you know I wrote it kind of takes away the anonymity. lol But I'm so happy to know that you understand why the chapter had to be this way. This was completely character driven, and in turn, led to Jake taking Jamie home.

      Thanks for reading Tom, and for your endless support! :-)

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  4. Do those boys even know what they are doing? One might have a great chance at a great girl, the other just doesn't know. Of course hot and steamy lol, can u say XX or XXX. anyways great, still wondering how its all going to go down, when Luke gets home, and finds out about the girl/sister of his girl. HUMMMM .

    I can say your diffinetly great at writing the hot scenes. Something I ver away from. LOL but i so enjoy all your writings.

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    1. Haha it's funny how you question Luke and Nate's advice. They believe that making a girl wait a little bit before they call her will build anticipation, as well as increase interest since they won't appear too eager. To a certain extent I agree with them. But I just hope the don't wait too long and miss that critical timeframe.

      *BLUSH* You're right, this chapter was past the R rating. More like XXX, like you said. Yes, it was porn!! lol Dammit, it was all Nate and Jessica's fault! They just had to get all kinky and nasty!

      Luke has a full plate to deal with when he gets home. lol First, with his parents, then his brothers, then Lyn wondering why he left and possibly Naveah.

      Awww, thank you Jerry. Although I was embarassed and scared to post this chapter, I'm glad I did. Hot love scenes are my favorite part to read in any story, and it's the part I love to write the most. I really do love writing romantic and steamy scenes, especially when the chracters have great chemistry. I definitely got over my fear after Ch. 16 from Memoirs. lol

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  5. That was steamy!
    Jess and Nate are playing with fire, Jake is just too cute:) I hope something happens between him and Jamie they seem like they are made for each other!
    Really enjoyed this chapter, I'm missing Luke though:( hehe!

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    1. Whew, I'm glad I didn't scare you away! Yes, that was a steamy chapter for me to write...embarassingly steamy. lol When I went back and reread it, I blushed, then giggled, and thought, "OMG, I cant' believe I wrote that." lol But it's out now, my love scene cherry for this story has been popped and now I can relax. I can just let the story progress naturally.

      I agree, Jessica and Nate are playing with fire. At the rate they're going, someone's emotions will get involved, and if it's not returned, someone can get really hurt.

      Jake and Jamie had a G rated night compared to Nate and Jessica, but it will benefit them in the long run. They have potential.

      Luke will be back in the next chapter, so you'll see him soon. :-)

      Thanks for reading, Claireybear!

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  6. ~ Lyn you turned up the HEAT, & pulled it of perfectly!HOT,hot,HOT!!!
    ~ Whats a poor girl got to do, but have a cold shower after all that steam!LOL!
    ~ Loved it,Nate is way out of his depth & way over his head,will he drown? or learn to swim!!!!!!!
    ~ Jake,yes go for her............she is sweet & likes the things you do,I hope everything goes well for these two,Jake, she is interested,she did give you her Phone Number!Do not hesitate to use it,Kay!(even if it is just to check she had a good night & got inside safely!LOL)
    ~ Loved it,so glad Jamie went home with Jake!YES!!!!(",)

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    1. I was so nervous about your response. I know you read the love scenes from Memoirs and they were steamy, but this is the most graphic one I've done so far. But after reading your comment, I am so relieved. Thank you, I'm glad enjoyed it!! I agree, this was one hot and bothered chapter. It was definitely a steamy one to write. Haha I felt like I needed to take a cold shower too, especially after writing this. And maybe a trip to the confessional booth. lol

      Nate definitely threw reason out the window and was acting on 100% animal instinct. I tell ya, Jessica has this way fo bringing out his kinky side, as if he wasn't pervy enough. But she just ramps it up even more. As shocked and embarassed as I was to write some of that stuff, this chapter was driven by their personalities. When they get together, the sex is mindblowing. The problem is that reality sets in once the orgasm wears off. Oh man, if Nate learns how to swim, watch out! He'll have to figure out a way to deal wtih Sarah.

      Jamie is definitely the girl-next-door and she's down-to-earth. She's playful, which brings out the big kid in Jake, and she's not afraid to challenge him (wifey material perhaps?) She made her move by giving him her number. Now the ball is in his court. He needs to make things happen before he falls in the friend zone. Awww, that would be sweet of him to call her just to make sure she got in okay, even though his brothers will think that's still acting eager and needy. lol

      Thanks for reading, Karima! Haha. Jamie 1, Naveah 0. xD

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  7. Whoa, that was quite a chapter. Im glad that Naveah wasnt anywhere to be seen in this one. I like Jamie, I think her and Jake are cute together. Hopefully he calls her soon and doesnt listen to his dippy brothers and keep her waiting. She wont wait long buddy!

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    1. LOL I'm glad I didn't scare you away, Kristine. xD Yes, that chapter was...something else. It's the most graphic one I've ever done, and I was even debating if I should post it. But I couldn't chicken out. lol

      Naveah lost to Jamie that night, but there's no telling what she'll do. She was pissed that Jamie took her spot next to Jake though, so keep your eyes open.

      Jake and Jamie do make an adorable pair. They seemed to hit it off and they both love SciFi. Haha his dippy brothers! I agree, he shouldn't wait too long to call her. She might think he's not interested and move on to someone else. Or worse...fall in the friend zone.

      Thanks for reading!

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  8. Nate and Jessica get down dirty. I laughed at your warning FYI!

    Jamie and Jake awww :) I love these two already! He definitely needs a good girl and she sounds like the one. I just hope following his brother's advice isn't about to get him messed up! That would suck.

    Um...I r confuseded. When did Jamie and Jake start playing a video game? One second he's all staring blankly at a horror movie analyzing the fact the blonde likes sci-fi and then the next she's kicking the shit out of his character. Just wondering :P kinda threw me a second and I had to reread that part.

    Jake...man... :) /romantic sigh. I love that yummy!

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  9. YES, Nate and Jessica don't hold back when it comes to sex, and especially when it comes to each other. She loves that he's a perv and he loves that she's a freak. Together, they make one kinky and nasty couple in the bedrooom. I had to add the author's note at the end because I was just so nervous about posting this chapter. I mean, I was basically writing...dare I say it? *cough*porn*cough* I didn't want to scare any readers away, but at the same time, I had to let Nake and Jessica's personalities shine.

    Awww, I'm glad you approves of Jamie! I know how protective you are of Jake, especially after seeing Naveah dance with him. She seems really down-to-earth, and her playful nature brings him out of his shell. It's okay for him to wait but he shouldn't wait too long either. He needs to make things happen.

    LOL oh, Daijah, you're so analytical that you pick up the little things that people overlook. Or at least haven't brought up if they noticed. I love that about you though. I didn't mean to confuse you but I forgot to add a scene transition. That may have been why you got confused. I was so wrapped up in Nate and Jessica's sexcapades that I didn't even notice that scene blip. I'll try to fix it soon. Thanks for pointing it out though! :-)

    Thanks for reading, D!

    PS: Everytime I see Jake, I think of you. I khow how much you adore him. ;-)

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    1. I had to let Nake and Jessica's personalities shine.

      ^^hmm I wonder what YOU were thinking...who the hell is Nake? HAHAHA though I guess he was that for the majority of the chapter :P

      Yes, my Jake. I want him to be happy and that means keep the crotch rot witch as far away from his sexy ass as possible. I mean that shit too...man...seeing that whore dancing with him I fucking flipped! That bitch gets no fucking...ugh! Let me stop before I rant.

      Mmm Jake. Can't wait to see him in (or out) of uniform! :D

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    2. Hahahaha I didn't even realize I wrote Nake! I was writing about Nate and ended up thinking about Jake. xD But you're right, it may be because he was naked for the most part. lol

      Awwww, thanks for looking out for Jake. I'll try to keep Naveah away from him but there's no telling what's up her sleeve.

      Hehe now that Nate broke this story's love scene cherry, there's still Luke and Jake. Luke came very close with Lyn but came to his senses. Jake, on the other hand, there's no telling. :-)

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  10. Jake - girls can dye their hair - stop thinking about brunettes! *stuff his shirt pockets with herbs to ward off evil she-demons. He and Jamie are so fun together - I hope he won't let looks get in the way of that 0 even though she's completely gorgeous!

    Nate - holy cow, man. I hope you're as good at putting out fires as you are at making them! *WHEW! He and Jessica have some crazy chemistry together! I can't wait to see if they have more than that...and they just might!

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    1. I know, Jake needs to get past this whole brunette fixation. He really does have a thing for dark hair though, and that's what drew him to Naveah from the start. And he's such a guy, he doesn't even realise that hair color is the easiest thing to change. He has a lot to learn, for sure. LOL you crack me up!! Stuffing herbs in his pockets to ward of she-demons? xD I think I may know who you're talking about. Jake is an idealist, and sometimes they get in the way of what's practical. But if he's looking for an O, I know a she-demon that would be happy to give him one. :D

      HAHA I know, this chapter was all NATE'S FAULT!! I tried to keep the love scene PG-13 but he and Jessica just HAD to make it all X-rated! xD They definitely know how to set the sheets on fire. I just hope noone gets burned. Well, after that marathon with Jessica, it's going to be a little hard for him to stay away.

      Thanks for reading, Jilly!

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  11. I loved the story, it was very x-rated but as you said that was their characters but it was very well done. As for his poor brother having to listen to that it was a good thing he took the girl home. I hope they see each other again :)

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    1. WHEW, I'm so glad to see that you're still here, Lckygirl. :-) I was afraid I'd scare you away with the...ah screw it...porn! lol Yes, it was porn, I admit it. I was even surprised at how graphic the love scene became, but I couldn't chicken out and not post it. lol Thank you, I'm glad you thought it still came out well-done. That means a lot.

      Haha I know, poor Jake had to listen to all that, knowing he had female company. I agree, it was good that he took her home, otherwise, that could have really turned her off. Stay tuned!

      Thanks for reading!

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    2. I have to admit after seeing the pics it did put me off a bit but I love the story so came back and read it again and realised it was in the nature of Nate and Jess. I am having the same issue I'm getting to the point in my story of a love scene but I am still debating mine, so we will see on mine but I will have no PC to use as my computer room is being pulled apart and re-decorated. Anyway love both stories so I will keep reading :)

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    3. I'm glad to hear that you were able to see Nate and Jessica's role in this chapter. Their personalities definitely determined the nature of the sex scene, no matter how much I wanted to keep it clean. It's also nice to know that I didn't scare away any of my readers. lol But I have to admit, there's something liberating about writing a graphic sex scene. Even though it pushes the boundaries, it really helps me discover a side of my characters that I would have never found.

      I'm looking forward to your love scene! Go with what feels comfortable to you. Write what you want to write, read over it, and see if there's anything that makes you cringe/uncomfortable. If that's the case, leave them out. You also have to be comfortable with what you post as well, and what you want your readers to see. I know I went through the same thing when I wrote Ch. 16 from Memoirs. That was my first full blown love scene. I was so scared of posting it, fearing readers will get offended. But that was the chance I had to take to stay true to my story and characters. I figure, if it offends someone then maybe my story isn't for them. To my surprise, readers enjoyed it. lol

      Thank you, Lckygrl! I'm grateful that you're following my stories.:)

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  12. Hahahaha, I love how different Jake/Jamie and Nate/Jessica were. Innocent little Jake, playing video games with a girl... while Nate is, ahem, getting his freak on.

    So let's see. Nate/Jessica first. I can see why he likes her... they've really got some chemistry, eh? I can see why this story is called Heat. They get down and dirty -- and I love it. Phew, Nate makes Brad look like a choir boy! Seems he's met his match in Jessica, though -- she is definitely not the girl next door. I hope things work out for them, but they seem like one of those couples who burn bright and fast and then explode til there's nothing left.

    And little Jakey... has to put up with Nate's sex noises and try not to be awkward around a cute girl at the same time. His internal monologue when he was driving Jamie home was just precious. Second-guessing himself and trying to figure out the mysterious female mind -- kid needs some help from his big bros. C'mon, Jake -- you're a hot blonde firefighter, and a Rossi to boot! You should be beating the girls off with a stick.

    Makes me wonder how Luke will be once he and Lyn finally hook up. I have the feeling he's somewhere between innocent, flustered Jake and dirty-talking Nate. Lucky Lyn will hopefully get to find out soon!

    ps. the 'que rico, papi' line made me laugh. Oh Jessica, you mamacita caliente!

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    1. LOL I know, I didn't realize how different Luke/Nate/Jake's personalities are until they started interacted with girls. It's funny because I originally thought Luke would be the playboy/perv but it turned out to be Nate. I thought Nate was going to be the shy/innocent one, but it turned out to be Jake. And I thought Nate would be Superman looking for his Lois Lane, but it turned out to be Luke. I tell ya, I was wrong about them! xD

      HAHA so now you understand why this story is called Heat? Not only do they fight fire but they also set the sheets on fire. lol YES, Nate and Jess definitely get down and dirty. There's a reason why they can't leave each other alone. OMG, so you think Nate is even nastier than Brad?? DAMN, he makes Brad look like a choir boy?? You're right though, this is the most graphic, nastiest sex scene I've ever written. lol And it's all Nate and Jessica's fault! I guess we'll have to see what happens with these two. It can go either way.

      I know, poor Jake, it was so embarassing for him. He made the right decision by taking her home. He could have potentially turned Jamie off, thinking they're freaks. Being a momma's boy and the baby, Jake definitely has a lot to learn about women. The good thing is he has his brothers and dad to ask for advice. Though they may not necessarily match. lol Haha Jake doesn't see himself as a hot blonde firefighter. I think he feels a little overshadowed by his brothers.

      I know, right? I'm curious too about Luke and Lyn finally hooking up. With two years of built up tension, it's goin' down!! Luke is a gentleman, and he will never take advantage of woman but once he gets the green light and he feels the situation is right, watch out! Lyn might end up in crutches for a few weeks. lol

      LOL that 'que rico, papi' bit came out of nowhere. Nate made her learn Spanish. Jessica can definitely hold her own!

      Thanks for reading, Meghan!

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    1. First comment didn't do justice!

      (o_o) (O_O)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

      OH MY GOD NATE!!!
      *drenches with cold water*

      Haaaaaaaaaa!

      *Grabs 'nother bucket*

      That was whooooooo!!! Talk about going at it! I'm I'm I'm speechless!! Whoooo!

      PS: Jake/Jamie--> Cute!

      Whoooooo!

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    2. LOL you crack me up!! I'm glad you enjoyed that session between Nate and Jessica. xD I was definitely nervous about posting this chapter, but I'm glad I did. Your comment makes it so worth it!! :-)

      YES, Nate doesn't play around. He means business in the bedroom, and he's not afraid to get nasty.

      I was definitely hot for me to write as well. You asked for hot fireman sex, you GOT one!! xD

      Thanks for reading, Jean-Marie!

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  14. I like Jake and Jamie together! They seem to really click.

    However, still not liking Jessica and Nate! It would horrible if she ends up pregnant! Then he would be tied to her!

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    1. There's definitely something between Jake and Jamie. Even though he's shy, her bubbly personality brings him out of her shell. It will be interesting to see how this one pans out.

      LOL you really don't like Jessica, do you?? lol Nate's mom feels the same way. There's something about Jessica that irks her. Well, with all that wild sex they're having, she could very well end up pregnant. Nate needs to be careful, otherwise, he will be tied to her, like you said. Whether he likes it or not.

      Thanks for reading, Daisies!

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